I saw it
I smelled it
I knew what it was…
Hovering hovering,
My wings going BUZZ!
The flower
The color
A nectar so sweet…
But what of this other?
Taking a treat?
I heard it
I felt it
I didn’t know why…
The music had drawn me
From searching the sky.
I found it
I passed it
Without any harm…
The red head kept making
The music of song.
I saw it
I smelled it
I knew what it was…
Hovering hovering,
My wings going BUZZ!
—
An experience I’ve never forgotten, written from the hummingbird’s perspective. For
dVerse Poetics.
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The repetition of the initial pattern of each stanza seems to buzz like a hummingbird’s wings.
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They are so delightful to watch ~ Enjoyed the refraining lines too about their hovering buzzing around ~
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You capture the hummingbird in the rhythm. Nicely done.
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i’m glad to read this today. i have written a haiku, of a flower that do entice hummingbirds. and maybe this is the perfect words to for the birds side. nice write! 🙂
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The rhythm added to the “buzzing” of the hummingbird’s wings. How fun to put yourself in the opposite perspective for this enchanting encounter.
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What a fun poem this is. you have captured the hummingbird perfectly.
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“The red head kept making / The music of song.” This is absolutely delightful!
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The short lines are great in capturing the hummingbird- so intense
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Love the short lines, the quick cadence — just like the hummingbird! Smiling I am.
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